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To: Bruce Momjian <bruce@momjian.us>
cc: Peter Eisentraut <peter_e@gmx.net>, pgsql-docs@postgresql.org
Subject: Re: XML documentation question 
In-reply-to: <200904261314.n3QDE6l08635@momjian.us> 
References: <200904261314.n3QDE6l08635@momjian.us>
Comments: In-reply-to Bruce Momjian <bruce@momjian.us>
	message dated "Sun, 26 Apr 2009 09:14:06 -0400"
Date: Sun, 26 Apr 2009 11:27:27 -0400
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From: Tom Lane <tgl@sss.pgh.pa.us>
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Bruce Momjian <bruce@momjian.us> writes:
> Peter Eisentraut wrote:
>> On Friday 24 April 2009 15:48:52 Bruce Momjian wrote:
>>> Apologies, I quoted the wrong section;  I meant to ask about this
>>> sentence:
>>> 
>>> The following functions return XML Schema documents describing the
>>> mappings made by the data mappings produced by the corresponding
>>> functions above.
>> 
>> I don't know what is unclear about this.

> The "mappings made by" and "mappings produced by" seem redundant, and
> hence confusing.

Couldn't the sentence be trimmed to just

	The following functions return XML Schema documents describing the
	mappings produced by the corresponding functions above.

If that phrasing is wrong for some reason, then I agree with Bruce that
the sentence needs a complete rewrite.

			regards, tom lane