Received: from malur.postgresql.org ([217.196.149.56]) by arkaria.postgresql.org with esmtps (TLS1.2:ECDHE_RSA_AES_256_CBC_SHA1:256) (Exim 4.89) (envelope-from ) id 1hyUhN-000074-HO for pgsql-docs@arkaria.postgresql.org; Fri, 16 Aug 2019 05:22:49 +0000 Received: from localhost ([127.0.0.1] helo=malur.postgresql.org) by malur.postgresql.org with esmtp (Exim 4.89) (envelope-from ) id 1hyUhM-0006eV-AD for pgsql-docs@arkaria.postgresql.org; Fri, 16 Aug 2019 05:22:48 +0000 Received: from makus.postgresql.org ([2001:4800:3e1:1::229]) by malur.postgresql.org with esmtps (TLS1.2:ECDHE_RSA_AES_256_CBC_SHA1:256) (Exim 4.89) (envelope-from ) id 1hyUhL-0006Zv-Vs for pgsql-docs@lists.postgresql.org; Fri, 16 Aug 2019 05:22:48 +0000 Received: from lb3-smtp-cloud8.xs4all.net ([194.109.24.29]) by makus.postgresql.org with esmtps (TLS1.2:ECDHE_RSA_AES_256_CBC_SHA1:256) (Exim 4.92) (envelope-from ) id 1hyUhI-0004av-RV for pgsql-docs@postgresql.org; Fri, 16 Aug 2019 05:22:46 +0000 Received: from webmailclassic.xs4all.nl ([IPv6:2001:888:0:22:194:109:20:203]) by smtp-cloud8.xs4all.net with ESMTPA id yUhDh0gSqDqPeyUhDhbIwx; Fri, 16 Aug 2019 07:22:41 +0200 Received: from 2001:983:39b6:1:1805:aa81:5182:7f65 by webmailclassic.xs4all.nl with HTTP (HTTP/1.1 POST); Fri, 16 Aug 2019 07:22:39 +0200 MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=US-ASCII; format=flowed Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit Date: Fri, 16 Aug 2019 07:22:39 +0200 From: Erik Rijkers To: Stephen Frost Cc: "Joshua D. Drake" , pgsql-docs Subject: Re: readability changes to postgres.sgml In-Reply-To: <20190816002623.GS16436@tamriel.snowman.net> References: <5ac2c96d-37a6-18aa-08c4-327a6fbff24b@commandprompt.com> <20190816002623.GS16436@tamriel.snowman.net> Message-ID: <996bcfe233f558276f4f5962673ba164@xs4all.nl> X-Sender: er@xs4all.nl User-Agent: XS4ALL Webmail X-CMAE-Envelope: MS4wfObwRgWnERMGn+n2Czr2BRww8U3H94pRhkym3uiuztKu6soeDUOCkdtGGZyWhGc88GCAOw3pI3zFO2bbXCiRJGnHjdlpkJ9J+r47wl8+mqnWHsVQbMR/ 9oBx9uGgMyBkfQxAF2qagjuC+AVfgPDIBmwBWmlfbCDmQ3Uf1kH/XtA+lp9dfyWNN+lG8RXqkMUyEBJ8qF+VQLCLlRfr+5M+5ZQ/tyrotZjAawa5sI8gMcVw oe6gxmZvgGYoFNdN9HaJ4QLq0JIMnb9PbV8xCKVIlWGL+A97DBbZ+ZcyOOQ75mGU List-Id: List-Help: List-Subscribe: List-Post: List-Owner: List-Archive: Precedence: bulk On 2019-08-16 02:26, Stephen Frost wrote: > Greetings, > > * Joshua D. Drake (jd@commandprompt.com) wrote: >> attached > they seem to be simply removing words and removing content that is For what it's worth, I think the proposed changes are all solid improvements. The text reads better with them, and that's what this is about -- not whether the removed little text-pieces were 'true' or not. However, there is one typo: + read independently. There are many extrernal programming extrernal -> external (and I would say that dropping that word 'external' would be another little improvement)