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Date: Sat, 17 Aug 2019 06:38:05 +0200
From: Erik Rijkers <er@xs4all.nl>
To: Stephen Frost <sfrost@snowman.net>
Cc: "Joshua D. Drake" <jd@commandprompt.com>, pgsql-docs
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Subject: Re: readability changes to postgres.sgml
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On 2019-08-16 07:22, Erik Rijkers wrote:
> On 2019-08-16 02:26, Stephen Frost wrote:
>> Greetings,
>> 
>> * Joshua D. Drake (jd@commandprompt.com) wrote:
>>> attached
> 
>> they seem to be simply removing words and removing content that is
> 
> For what it's worth, I think the proposed changes are all solid
> improvements. The text reads better with them, and that's what this is
> about -- not whether the removed little text-pieces were 'true' or
> not.
> 
> 
> However, there is one typo:
> 
> +    read independently.  There are many extrernal programming
> 
> extrernal -> external
> (and I would say that dropping that word 'external' would be another
> little improvement)

and:

Lasty -> Lastly

importantance -> importance